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Band 4.5

“By definition, charity is generosity in offering money, food, and help to the needy. To some people, such kindness should be boundless, others argue for a limit to it.” Which opinion do you support? In about 300 words, present your arguments.

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Donating
the
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stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 like cash , eatable
items
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 and support to the person who needs is
such
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 a
kindness
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kind
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 act and
it
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there
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 should not be any limit .
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 it is an argued issue that
act
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 of kindness should not be limitless .
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donation
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the donation
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is depends
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 upon the situation,we can predict how much
money
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 or
items
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 needed . I will briefly describe my views in the upcoming paragraphs.
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necessity
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 of
items
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depend
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 upon the area and the incidents
occurred
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that occurred
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 ,
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 , if someone donating to
the
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any organisation,
then
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 we can consider there is limited stuff is needed since everyone is donating the
items
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 over there . If
i
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 will talk about any natural disaster,in that case ,no one realises how much
money
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 or food
items
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needed
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are needed
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.
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, In 2023 , In Kerala , India ; a natural disaster(flood) came and everyone lost
there
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 houses and necessary
items
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 ,
then
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 other states helped them to regain
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 houses and other stuff and gave
the
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limitless donations .
Conseqently
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Consequently
, everything
is depend
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 upon the need
of
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 stuff.
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,it is hard to set a limit for the
charity
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 because it is all upon the person who wants to donate ; how much pocket is allowing
to
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him to donate
items
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 or
money
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.
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,In India , rich people
is
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 doing
charity
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 with
big
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a big
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 amount of
money
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 ,if
i
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 will talk about
normal
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a normal
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 person they can just help with a small amount of cash.
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, In India , the Bollywood actor Salman
khan
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 runs a
charity
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 organisation named
as
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Human
being
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, he started
this
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 because his pocket allows him to
suppor
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support
this
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charity
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 organisation.
As a result
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 ,
charity
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 means to help someone without thinking
the
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about the
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 amount of
money
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 ,as
ocean
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 is filled with
a little drops
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a little drop
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 of water . In conclusion, no matter how much food
items
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 ,
money
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 or clothing is donated , just needs to be focused
to help
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on helping
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 needy persons with good deeds.

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Language
Try to rephrase sentences for clarity, and ensure proper grammar usage. For example, 'the stuffs like cash' should be 'items such as cash'.
Content
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This will enhance your ability to convey your ideas more clearly and compellingly.
Cohesion
Use transitional words and phrases more effectively to connect paragraphs and ideas smoothly, enhancing the overall flow of your essay.
Content
You have shown a clear stance on the issue of charity, advocating for limitless donations which is a strong perspective.
Content
Your use of examples, such as the natural disaster in Kerala, adds relevance to your points.
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