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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
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The table provides key information about the alters in
ways
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 of travelling in England from 1985 to 2000. The units are measured in miles per person in a year.
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, it is clear from the table that cars were popular modes in both years given.
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the number of
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 local buses showed a significant decrease,
whereas
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 people
were
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travelling by train increased notably.
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 what is shown, walking was observed a slight drop from 255 in 1985 to 237 by 2000.
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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 followed the same trend decreasing from 51 in 1985 to 41 by 2000. Meanwhile,
car
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the car
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 remained in dominant mode with 3199 and 4806 miles ,1985 and 2000 respectively. Local
bus was
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buses
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 plunged considerably from 429 in 1985 to 274 by 2000. In terms of
Long distance
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Long-distance
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bus
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buses
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,
in contrast
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, jumped by double from 54 in 1985 to 124 in 2000.
Train
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was
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soared from 289 in 1985 to 366 in 2000. Taxi
initially
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 was the least
modes
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mode
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 preferred with 13 in 1985 ,
then
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 went up to 42 in 2000.

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