The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar graph compares the proportion of both genders in eight
age
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groups who did regular sports in their life in the USA in 2010.
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, it can seen that the percentage of
female
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females
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who did regular exercise was an upward trend in all
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groups ,
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the participation rate for men fluctuated substantially.
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with , the highest figure for women who preserving exorcise was
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their
age
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between 35 and 64 , with approximately 53 % , compared to around
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apply
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39 % to 45 % for men . The second highest rank
porcentage
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percentage
was for
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those
who
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apply
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from 15 to 24 , at about 52.8 % for boys and 47.7 % for girls , and
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following that
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between 25 and 34 at around 48.9 % for
female
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females
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and for
male
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males
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almost 42.2 % . Regarding the
age
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group who did activities and exercises those who are aged from 65 and over .
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the percentages of both
man
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men
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and women were very nearly with 47 %
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, in general, sport is
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an important
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part
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of
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human life.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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