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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic a problem what are the cause of this and what action can be taken to solve this problem?

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 a solution for the
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 jams and
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government
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public transportation and do not impose them to pay any fee .
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 air pollution and a lot of
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traffic
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 in the future.

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coherence
Consider revising the sentence structure to ensure clarity and grammatical correctness.
cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate ideas into paragraphs, particularly for distinct points such as causes and solutions.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your arguments about traffic solutions and causes.
task achievement
Your attempt to address both the causes and solutions to the traffic issue is commendable.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • congested
  • infrastructure
  • public transportation
  • economic growth
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • congestion charges
  • cycling infrastructure
  • traffic management
  • eco-friendly
  • optimization
  • alternative routes
  • commuting
  • vehicle emissions
  • mass transit
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • sustainable development
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