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The given charts show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons. Gia Linh

The given charts show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons. Gia Linh
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As we can see in the previous chart, in
1980s
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, the dominant source of
energy
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 was
oil
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, generating
the
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42% of total
energy
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consumption
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, followed by natural gas and coal, contributing 26% and 22% respectively, and the
less
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fewer
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 sources of
energy
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 used were generated by hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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, representing 5% each. By
1990s
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the 1990s
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,
the
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oil
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consumption
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 decreased significantly to 33%,
natural
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and natural
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 gas
also
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 experienced a slight decrease,
droping
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dropping
 to 25%.
In
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 the other hand,
the
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coal usage increased to 27%, making it the second
energy
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 source of
energy
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 after
oil
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. Nuclear
power
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also
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 had a significant rise, doubling its share from 5% to 10%. Hydroelectric
power
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 remained constant at 5%. In
conclusion
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the
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energy
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consumption
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 presented a variation between
1980s
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the 1980s
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 and 1990s, noticing that
t he
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the
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consumption
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 of
oil
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decrease
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decreased
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, but
remains
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remained
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as
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the primary
energy
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 source, and
this
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declination
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 was accompanied by a rise in nuclear and coal usage.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil, consumption, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • proportion
  • dominance
  • trends
  • decline
  • usage
  • technological advancements
  • policy shifts
  • market demand
  • comparison
  • statistical data
  • significance
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