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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph below illustrates the figures
of
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 items transported in the United Kingdom from four methods of transport between 1974 and 2002. From the
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it is clear that
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 the Road was the highest number in all time periods. At the same, the pipeline scored the lowest statistic
in
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 all
times
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.
also
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, uncommon goods transport were not in the greatest tops
To begin
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 with, the Road
Strarted
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started
 at 73
million
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tonnes
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 in the first year.
Then
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. It increased most of the time until 95
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
In addition
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, both
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Water and Rail scored an equal amount
by
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 40
million
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tonnes
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. But, the Water transport
raised
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 by 50% in 2002.
In contrast
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, the
Rail way
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Railway
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 fluctuated until it
returened
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returned
 to the first situation.
Lastly
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, the
piepeline
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pipeline
 jumped from 3 to 21
million
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tonnes
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 in only 7 years. After that. It was stable for 22 years by about 20
million
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tonnes
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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