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The best way to reduce poverty is to provide at least 6 years of free education for all children to learn to listen,read and count the number.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is stated that
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providing free
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children can help
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decrease
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 of
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 of poverty in
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. I fully support
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 statement as learning is
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 right of every kid despite their social or financial status.
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education
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 can help the citizens of
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.
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learning in school can help the child to develop social and intellectual skills.
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, if a student is good
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 any skill, the
schools
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 helps them to implement it
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real
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 world.
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giving free study to
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people will help in
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. The new generation
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 the future of any nation so six years of free
education
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 will help to ensure that workers have
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 knowledge to read or count. Other than that, it
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 helps in encouraging social equality within the society.
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, a poor and rich kid both
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 free learning will help
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people understand that everyone is equal in
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education
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 system.
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 job opportunities for the youngsters as well. To illustrate, when there
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 more schoolers to
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,
government
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have
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 hire more teachers for the work. In conclusion, to decline the poverty in country, teaching children free is
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 step. It will create both
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 on society but it should not be the sole focus
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 the government. Healthcare, social safety and financial aid should
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 as well.

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task achievement
Expand on and provide more specific examples to support your main points. For instance, when mentioning social equality, you could discuss how education can change the life trajectory of individuals from low-income families.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your sentences are well-structured and free from grammatical errors. For example, phrases like 'learning is fundamental right' should include 'a' to become 'a fundamental right'.
coherence and cohesion
Consider enhancing the transitions between your ideas for better flow. Using linking phrases can make the essay smoother to read and improve clarity.
task achievement
You made a strong argument for why education is essential in combating poverty, clearly outlining its importance in developing social and intellectual skills.
coherence and cohesion
The essay contains a logical progression of ideas, with each paragraph addressing a relevant point related to the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic background
  • basic learning
  • essential skills
  • personal and professional growth
  • educated populace
  • economic benefits
  • future workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • unemployment rates
  • social equity
  • bridging the gap
  • underprivileged children
  • socio-economic status
  • cycle of poverty
  • long-term solution
  • immediate measures
  • financial aid
  • healthcare
  • social safety nets
  • robust educational policies
  • global examples
  • substantial investment
  • infrastructure
  • trained teachers
  • learning materials
  • effective implementation
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