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Band 5.5

You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir or Madam, Since I have been accepted to participate in an English course in Greenhouse, I am writing
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 letter to request your
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 in finding
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suitable accommodation near the campus. I would like to rent a one-bedroom flat in Belgrad district, the same
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 that my college is located in, for at least 3 months.
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, I prefer to have a private bathroom and kitchen
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 a small balcony.
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 the starting date of the course is 2nd July, I would like to move to
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 town a week earlier to finalize my
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, I would appreciate it if you could arrange a suitable apartment for me on 25th May. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Tina Ross

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coherence and cohesion
You could improve the organization of your paragraphs by starting a new paragraph for each new main idea. For instance, consider separating your request for accommodation from your preferences and specific dates to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Ensure to check the name of the town or college. It appears there is a small typographical error with 'Greenhouse' instead of 'Greenmount', which may cause some confusion.
task achievement
Your letter has a polite tone and clearly expresses your accommodation needs, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a logical flow, making it easy for the reader to understand your request.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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