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The given charts provides information about global water use by sector and the water consumption in Brazil and congo in 2000. summarize key information and make comparison where relavant.

The given charts provides information about global water use by sector and the water consumption in Brazil and congo in 2000. summarize key information and make comparison where relavant.
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The line graph illustrates information about the worldwide usage of
water
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 in three different
sectors
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 and the
water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 and Congo in 2000.
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, the usage of
water
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 worldwide in three different
sectors
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 increased over the period. The majority of
water
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 was utilized in the agriculture sector. The
water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 was higher than in Congo. In 1990, around 500
km
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water
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 was utilized in agriculture, and the figure gradually increased over the period, and roughly 3000
km
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water
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 was utilized in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector in 2000.
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, from 1900 to 1940, the use of
water
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 in industries and domestic
sectors
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 remained almost stable. From 1950, the use of
water
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 in both
sectors
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 started to rise, and in 2000, more than 1000km
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water
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 was used in
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector and roughly 300
km
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water
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 was utilized for domestic use. In 2000, the population of
Brazil
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 was 176 million,
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26,500
km
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land
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 was irrigated by
water
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 and 359m
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water
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 was consumed
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per person. The population of Congo was significantly lower than
Brazil
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 in 2000, which was 5.2 million. Only 100 m
land
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 was
irregated
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irrigated
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 and 8 m
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 was consumed
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per person.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sectors, brazil, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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