You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbour complained. Write a letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.

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Dear sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to apologize for playing loud music on my birthday. It was not my

intension

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to make you uncomfortable with the loud music. One of my friends wanted to perform a dance to cheer me.

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, the volume was low in the

beggining

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beginning

, over time someone increased it without my knowledge.

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, with that happy

moment

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I did not

give

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attention to the loud music. I am celebrating

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birthday after 10 years because of my promotion in the job. I was promoted

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senior manager and rewarded with handsome pay. So, my friends requested me to hold the party in my home. I would like to apologize for my careless behaviour and promise that

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kind of

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will not happen in my house again. I am really sorry for the inconvenience caused. I look forward to your response and please accept my apologies. Yours sincerely, Santhoshkumar

ksanthosh701Wed Feb 19 2025

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Be cautious of spelling errors (like 'intension' instead of 'intention' and 'beggining' instead of 'beginning').

coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity. You might consider separating the explanation of the music issue from the apology and the explanation for the celebration.

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Consider including a touch more warmth or friendliness in your closing to enhance the overall tone of the letter.

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You did a great job explaining the reason for the celebration, which adds personal context to the apology.

coherence and cohesion

Your letter has a clear structure with an opening, explanation, apology, and closing, which is good for coherence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

160 words

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You had a birthday party and you were playing loud music. Your neighbour complained. Write a letter of apology explaining that it was a special occasion and that it won't happen again.

The debate exists on whether young people should have the freedom to select their own profession or if they should adopt a pragmatic approach, considering their future more seriously. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Success is often measured in terms of how much somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

Fast food is becoming a part of people's daily life everwhere, and this has had negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that reading stories form a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children to what extent do you agree or disagree.

What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?