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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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The maps illustrate the development of the Central
Library
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 from 20 years ago to the present day.
Overall
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, the
library
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 has been modernised as there are some redevelopments
as well as
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 new facilities added inside the
library
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. Two decades ago, there was a
room
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 for Children’s
Books
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 on the north-eastern
side
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 of the
library
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, today,
this
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room
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 has been transformed into a Lecture
room
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while
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 the children’s
books
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 have been curated to only children’s
fiction
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books
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 and relocated to the north-western
side
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 of the
library
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, replacing the entertainment
room
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 (CDs, Videos and computer games) and completed with a larger
room
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 that has two sofas and storytelling events. Opposite the lecture
room
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, visitors can now spot adult
fiction
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books
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, an information desk and self-service machines which were previously occupied
for
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by
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 adult
non
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non-fiction
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fiction
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books
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. On the south-eastern
side
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 of the
library
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, a cafe has replaced the enquiry desk, which previously served as a book return and ticket purchase counter. Moving to the western
side
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 of the
library
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, the reading
room
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 for magazines and newspapers was changed into a computer
room
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 and the door was moved to be closer to the entrance
room
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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 convenience, tables and chairs were added in the middle of the
library
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 separating the west and east
side
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 of the
library
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.
Finally
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, to the left
side
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 of these tables and chairs, visitors can find all types of
books
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 which was the place for adult
fiction
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books
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 twenty years ago.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books, side, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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