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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The graphs provide historical data and future projections of birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101 in twenty-
year
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 intervals.
Overall
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, the birth
rate
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 sharply surged in 1941,
then
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 gradually declined after the
year
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 of 2001.
On the other hand
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, the death
rate
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 slowly increase until 2021, and is expected to exponentially jump
then
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 remain stable from 2061 onwards. In terms of newborn population, New Zealand used to have 20,000 to 30,000 newborn babies per
year
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 before 1941,
however
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, the
rate
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 greatly rose to almost 70,000 babies annually in 1961
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 and remained relatively high until 2001. The birth
rate
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 started to decrease and is expected to
further
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 decline to around 40,000
people
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 per
year
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 in 2101.
In contrast
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, the number of
people
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 who died annually slowly grew over the years, from around 10,000
people
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 in 1901 to slightly less than 30,000
people
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 in 2001.
Then
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, the country had been facing a fast-growing death
rate
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, with approximately 35,000
people
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 in 2021 and an estimate of nearly 60,000
people
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 per
year
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 in 2061. Eventually, the number will have remained roughly the same as in 2061.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth
  • stable
  • projections
  • surpass
  • decline
  • mid-20th century
  • late 21st century
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare improvements
  • social norms
  • indicate
  • trend
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