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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
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Given line graph depicts the data about the citizens of
China
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 and
India
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 from
the
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2000 to the leading day with predictions for increasing
to
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 the year 2050.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
China
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 and
India
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 will have the same amount of people in 2032.
Aditionally
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,
India
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experience
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 constant growth
while
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China
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 has
a
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an
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estimately
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estimated
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 stable quantity of
the
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population.
According to
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 the information, in 2000
India
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 had 1,000
billion
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 of
total
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 population.
Then
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 it witnessed
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a noticeble
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noticeble
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noticeable
 rise
on
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of
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 200
millions
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million
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 for the next ten years and
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further
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further,
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 it continues to increase constantly.
And starting
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from
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in
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the
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2030
India
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 will strive
approximately
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for approximately
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 1,450
billion
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of
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people and during
next
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the next
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 20 years it will reach 1,600
billion
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. At the same time,
China
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 had 1,250
billion
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 of
population
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the population
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 in
year
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the year
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 2000. Going
further
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, it started to rise
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up
uo
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up
 and approach the highest
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amount
amoun
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number
 of people (

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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