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Writing Samples
Band 5

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter •describe the problem; •explain how it affects you; •say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.

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 Sir or Madam, I am writing to you concerning the payment that
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 the furniture from your cafe. Recently, I have been experiencing difficulties because of the chairs and tables that are usually kept outside for your customers from dawn to dusk.
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, it obstructs my brisk walk in the morning with my toddler because of the dearth of space to cross the sidewalk.
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Your letter should begin with a clear explanation of the problem before diving into its impacts. Try to structure your ideas logically to enhance clarity.
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Make sure to explicitly mention what actions you will take if the issue is not resolved. This adds a sense of urgency to your complaint.
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Consider using a more formal greeting, like 'Dear Manager' instead of 'Hello Sir or Madam', to suit the tone of a complaint letter.
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Your writing conveys a genuine concern for the issue and reflects your everyday challenges, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
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You have effectively stated that the outdoor furniture causes an obstruction, which is central to your complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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