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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided line graph depicts information about the proportion of
Australian
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 goods and products sent to
Japan
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, the US,
China
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 and
India
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 in a period of 22
years
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Australian
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exports
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 to the US and
Japan
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 have decreased over the
years
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,
whereas
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 significant growth is observed with regard to sending goods to
China
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 from Australia. And the smallest proportion of these
exports
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 end up in
India
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. The initial figure for
Australian
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 exportation to
Japan
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 was as high as slightly over a quarter, and 11% of the aforementioned goods and products were being sent to the US.
While
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 both these figures suffered a slight fall in the first 5
years
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, the American numbers fluctuated for another 10
years
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whereas
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 the percentage of
Australian
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exports
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 to
Japan
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 maintained a steady fall. They both reached their lowest in 2010, 16% and 5% respectively. the starting figures for
China
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 and
India
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 were roughly the same, and in the first decade, their growth was somewhat negligible.
However
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, from the beginning of the second
decade
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decade,
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exports
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 to
China
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 started increasing significantly, leapfrogging the Japanese figures in 2007 and reaching an ultimate high of 27% in 2012.
On the contrary
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,
India
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 failed to follow
China
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's lead, never surpassing its peak of 7% in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, japan, china, india, years, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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