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Band 2.5

Rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers ( for example: Doctors, engineers and scientists ) of poor countries as they are needed by their home countries more than rich countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often debated that developed nations should not offer
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 job opportunities to the people migrating from
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developing countries owing to the belief that their own nation needs them the most. In my perspective, both individuals and grown countries should have the liberty to choose their work environment and vice-versa.
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, immigration to another geographical area may
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 the menace of shortage in staff in scientific jobs as
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 positively fills the gaps with skilled workers and can be effective both economically and socially for a nation. For
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coronavirus
 Canada was struggling with
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 of staff in
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 system and the
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 was
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exacerbated
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recruiting
 staff from
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growing countries
 like India.
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 of talented people offers them
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recognition
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 and opportunities which they could have missed in their own native land under the negligence of high competition. To illustrate,
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developing countries
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 ccomp[leted that puts a
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 on them to showcase their
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abilities
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 uplifts the economic status of the country

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You presented a nuanced perspective on the issue of skilled workers migrating from developing to developed countries.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brain drain
  • skilled workforce
  • development
  • economic disparity
  • healthcare system
  • infrastructure
  • innovation
  • ethical implications
  • global community
  • emigration
  • shortages
  • training and development
  • advanced training
  • employment opportunities
  • work-life balance
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