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The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below provides information about the amount of money spent on consumer goods in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that more money is being spent on consumer goods in the
UK
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 than in
France
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. Looking at the details, the most significant difference in the amount of money being spent on a particular type of product in these two countries
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 is observed in cameras.
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 the people in the
UK
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 spent more than double that of
France
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.
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, with regard to expenditures on cars and books, 50,000 and 100,000 more pounds are being spent in the
UK
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, respectively.
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, the figures show that computers and perfumes created a bigger source of expense in
France
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 than in the
UK
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, but only by a slight amount.
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 in the former, the expenditures on computers and perfumes were as high as 200000 and 400000 respectively, the same number fell short by over 50,000 and 25000 in the latter.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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