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Band 3

Your local newspaper is experiencing low sales of its newspapers since many readers are now choosing the online version. Its current number of online subscribers is now three times the number of print subscribers. The newspaper has sent a survey to all of its print and online subscribers to see whether there is enough demand to keep the print version. Explain Why do you prefer Stop producing the print version of the newspaper.

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From my perspective, the most suitable option will be to stop producing the print
version
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 of the newspaper. Even when keeping both versions would be a good idea, it is not the most cost convenient one.
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, stopping the production of the print newspaper
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 will bring significant saving cost to the
company
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. Reduction
on
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in
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 fixes and variable
cost
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costs
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 will come from
this
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 decision since having a production plant implies machinery, technical personnel, and an important number of supplies.
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, the
company
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 would be able to invest more in benefits to the employees and new technology for the virtual
version
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.
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, focusing on the most relevant market demand could contribute to the
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company
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 success significantly. As the market is interested
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 the virtual environment providing a high quality of content will guarantee
the
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apply
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customer retention.
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, offering
to
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apply
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the customer a variety of news will attract more
visitor
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visitors
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 to the website,
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as
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and as
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 a
result
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 the
company
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 revenue will be impacted positively. As it was mentioned above, I strongly
consider
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believe
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 that stopping the print
version
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 will bring several benefits and more success to the local newspaper. Thanks for considering my opinion and I will support any decision
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that will
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 be taken.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or data to strengthen your argument. For instance, you could mention trends in the newspaper industry or statistics about online readership.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph logically flows from one idea to the next. Try to use linking phrases to enhance the coherence between your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that summarizes the main idea that will be discussed in that paragraph.
Content
You've made a strong argument for cost savings from stopping print production, which is well-articulated.
Content
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and expresses willingness to support the newspaper's decision, adding a personal touch to your essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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