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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is ? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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I was born when
car
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ownering
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ownership
 was a point of rich people. Having a
car
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 in your garage
require
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requires
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 some more
efforts
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effort
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 like
clining
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cleaning
cloning
clinging
, providing regular technical
sevice
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service
, changing
tyres
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tyres
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 and more similar things.
Hangling
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Handling
 all of those features needs to pay the bills on time. So in previous years of my life I
though
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thought
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 it would be
initialy
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initially
 better to buy a home
instead
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 of
buy
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buying
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 a
car
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.
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, now
car
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 ownership become more convenient for my
envieroment
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environment
. We
prefer
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prefer to
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 pay more for easily getting to the destination that
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use
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uses
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 public
transport
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. As for me, it is more
appropriative
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appropriate
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getting
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to get
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on
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in
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traffic
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a traffic
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 jam and
listening
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listen
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 to music or useful
podcast
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podcasts
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. I do not get
crasy
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crazy
in
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about
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such
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roads
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road
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advantures
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advantages
. It is common for me and my family. And now after several years of living in Kyiv,
capital
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the capital
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 of Ukraine, I handle it more like
me
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my
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 time for
meditaion
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meditation
. Sometimes it is more convenient to
use
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 public
transport
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,
is not
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isn't
 it? I watched
one
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 episode
from
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of
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'Top
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the 'Top
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 Gear' TV show where the journalists bet on what would be faster to get from London (UK) to Milan (Italy).
And
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One
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one
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 of them used a
car
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driving
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to drive
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,
another journalists
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another journalist
other journalists
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 used
a public
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public transport
a means of public transport
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transport
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 like trains and
subway
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the subway
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. They
shown
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show
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 in Europe is
more
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apply
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faster to get
your
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to your
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 destination using public
transport
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.  In my opinion,
more
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for more
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that
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than
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 100 years people
get
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have
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understanding
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understood
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 that they need new
transport
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instead
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horses
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of horses
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 and cars. And they claimed on a new subway developing, what was
a
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apply
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very extraordinary. Engineers got lots of different
challanging
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challenging
situation
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situations
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 that provided lots of new building construction
visuions
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visions
. I like to explore
europian
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European
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 subway stations. I
considerate
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consider
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 they are a piece of art. Each station
describe
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describes
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 the main behaviour of each nationality and culture. By the way,
the
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apply
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public
transport
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 become more convenient to
use
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 on working days. There are no long
queue
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queues
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, because the schedule of
transport
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 was
planed
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planned
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 deeply. And
extra
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the extra
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 advantage of not using
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car
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the car
a car
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 in rushing hours is not being late for
meeting
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meetings
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 or work. You could plan your ride in minutes. Is not it
a
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apply
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magic?  If I had lived in
one
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 of the big
city
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cities
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 in
European
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a European
the European
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 country, I would have used public
transport
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 in daily life and
own
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my own
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car
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 for weekends.
However
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, I would better to
use
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a
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apply
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car
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 sharing. It
seams
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seems
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 to be a little bit
cheeper
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cheaper
 than
ownering
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owning
lowering
 the regular
one
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.

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Grammar & Vocabulary
Improve grammatical accuracy and correct spelling errors (e.g., 'ownering' to 'ownership').
Coherence
Include clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader.
Task response
Strengthen your conclusion to summarize your main points more effectively.
Content
You provide personal insights and anecdotes which can engage the reader.
Example
You've included examples such as the TV show 'Top Gear' which help support your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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