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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree?

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Formal examinations are used worldwide to assess
students
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 they are effective, new methods
such
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 as continual
assessments
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 in the form of classwork and
projects
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 are being introduced. It is agreed that
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this newly developed methods
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satisfactory
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 way to do
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. Taking into consideration
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students
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 capability to present their skills in different ways
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 the decrement of stress load they usually face with informal examination.
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provides
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 an efficient way to assess
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,
students
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 are encouraged to work together as a team and do
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 using their talents and skills.
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 advantage is missed out when using the informal examinations that
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students
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 into a
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 path of memorising what is in the book and
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 it down
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 exam paper .
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, it is more reliable to assess
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 through continual
assessments
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. Another point to consider, it is commonly known that exams are associated with stress.
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while
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 preparing for exams
Students
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 are reading hundreds of pages as they don't know which part they are going to be asked of.
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, the pressure of scores and the fear
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 that the
students
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 carry on in their minds throughout the stressful exam conditions. Continual
assessments
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 are much better for
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 point.
Thus
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, Classwork and
projects
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 are better ways to replace informal exams. In conclusion, continual assessment is a more reliable method to evaluate
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, as
students
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 are able to present their skills, and
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 the stress they stand against using informal examinations.
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 why it is agreed that that assessing
students
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 using
projects
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 or class work is more effective. In the recent
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 it is predicted
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 method.

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Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction. The phrase 'it is agreed' is somewhat vague. Consider rephrasing it to 'I agree' or 'I disagree'. This will provide clarity on your stance.
coherence cohesion
In the first body paragraph, ensure to avoid technical terms like 'informal examinations' as it can create confusion. Instead, use 'formal examinations' to maintain clarity.
coherence cohesion
There are a few spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'boreing' should be 'boring', 'decrement' could be replaced with 'reduction'). It would help to proofread for these errors for better overall quality.
coherence cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structure and connect your ideas more smoothly to enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear argument for continual assessments, highlighting valid reasons such as teamwork and stress reduction.
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The use of examples to illustrate points, such as students reading hundreds of pages, strengthens the argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized assessment
  • criteria
  • benchmark
  • performance comparison
  • evaluation under pressure
  • simulate
  • real-world scenarios
  • time management
  • comprehensive coverage
  • subject grasp
  • objectivity
  • lifelong learning
  • engagement
  • practical application
  • skill development
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • individualized feedback
  • student well-being
  • exam stress
  • academic environment
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