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The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information the pcentage of the population in four Asian countries in cities from 1970 to 2020, woth predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the informaton by selecting and reposting the main features, and make complarisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the
population
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 living in was lived in urban
centers
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 in
four
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 different Asian countries, –Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia– since 1970 with projections through 2040. Generally speaking, all
four
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 nations experienced growth in urban
population
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 during the given time period, with Malaysia showing the most significant increase. There were just above 30% of the
population
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 in the Philippines living in metropolitan areas in 1970.
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 figure rose significantly to just under 50% by 1990 before experiencing a slight decline to just above 40% in 2010.2010. Over the course of the next
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 decades, projections indicate a gradual recovery, reaching around 50% by 2040. In the same way, Malaysia saw a comparable trend between 1970 and 1990, starting out at 30%, and surging to nearly 50%. From
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 point, the urban
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 increased sharply, reaching a projected peak of just over 80% in 2040, which was the highest proportion of city dwellers among the
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 countries.
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, Thailand and Indonesia
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lower urbanization rates. In 1970, only around 20% of the Thai
population
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 lived in cities, and
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 figures steadily climbed to an estimated 60% by 2040. Indonesia had the lowest urban
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 at just over 10% in 1970 but experienced the most rapid increase. By 2040, projections suggest that over 60% of Indonesians will live in cities, making it the second country with the highest percentage of urban dwellers among the
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, four with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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