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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate how the city of Nelson changed between 2000 and the
current
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present
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days
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day
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.
Overall
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, the area was completely modernised over the given time period. After
constucting
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constructing
conducting
 new amenities for the convenience of people, the territory became
more
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a more
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 residential district. The multi-storey hall of residents was built
on
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in
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 the north-west part of the town, next to the university which is the only
buildinf
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building
remained
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that remained
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 untouched.
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, more commercial markets were built,
such
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 as
new
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newly
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 opened shopping mall
on
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in
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 the
north-east
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northeast
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 zone
while
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 the south of the district
were
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was
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 situated by a new covered store and a new market replacing old stalls in the 2000s. Noticeably, the trees in the zone were totally chopped down. The train station,
on the other hand
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, was relocated into the central
down-town
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downtown
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, lining up
tramline
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the tramline
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 nearby.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the centre was renovated by implementing the bike rental
schme
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scheme
. The road in
south
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the south
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 was redeveloped and converted into
the
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a
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 path for pedestrians, making the environment even more eco-friendly.
Last
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 but not
the
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least, other leisure facilities - restaurants, clubs and bars - were launched for the unwinding meetings of inhabitants.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential
  • commercial
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • de-urbanization
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • industrial
  • transformation
  • recent times
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • key features
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