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The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two-bar chart illustrates the proportion of British
individuals
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 who made money donations to charity by
age
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 range in two distinct
years
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, in 1990 and in 2010.
Overall
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, the decrease in the percentage of donors under 50
years
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 old,
along with
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 the rise in 51 or older ones were among the most notable features.
To begin
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 with, for young people below 25
years
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 old, the figure noticed a decrease in 2010 from approximately 16% to under 7%.
Similarly
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, the percentage of
individuals
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 in both
age
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 groups, 26-35 and 36-50 who gave money to charity was lower in 2010 than it was 20
years
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 before. More specifically, these figures dropped from approximately 31% and 42% to under 25% and 35%, respectively.
On the contrary
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, older
individuals
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 were observed to make more donations in 2010 in comparison to 1990. It was witnessed that around 35% of people in the
age
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 group 51-65 made donations in 1990,
while
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this
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 figure reached almost 40% in 2010. The proportion of elderly
individuals
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 in the
age
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 of 66 and over was
also
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 noticed to increase from approximately 32% to around 35% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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