Some people believe that technology has made our lives more convenient, while others argue that it has caused more harm than good. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Recent decades have witnessed tremendous growth in
technology
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. No doubt, because of
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we are able to get
reliable
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a reliable
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lifestyle .
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,
large
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number of
community
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argue that their demerits outweigh the merits . I personally think that , though inventions are good for development
but
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it
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they
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also
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bring some fatal consequences on earth . In
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essay
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I will elaborate both views and
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justify my opinion .
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,it is
undeniable
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an undeniable
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fact that
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the development of new
technology
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made our life more appropriate.In ancient times
people's
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people
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had no means of transport to commute from one place to
other
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another
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.They could not
be communicate
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with each other .
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, with the usage of cars and mobile
phone
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phones
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, we can reach our dear ones easily .
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, one of the major
advancement
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of
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in
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technology
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is the Internet . Social networking
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has
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made
world
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the world
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so small and
produce
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produced
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more work opportunities on
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a
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global
bases
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basis
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.
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, I reckon that
with
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the invention of new
equipments
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equipment
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in the hospitality stream gives
long
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life to human beings .
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this
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,as
coin
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has two sides pros and cons ,
technology
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also
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has disadvantages. Foremost , pollution is the detrimental cause of
technology
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Ubiquity
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The ubiquity
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of cars ,buses ,
bikes
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and bikes
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on the roads brings
air-pollution
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air pollution
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and
caused
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causes
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heart diseases.
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,
vast
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the vast
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invention of communication equipment made
mans
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men
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smaller minds .
Nowdays
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, many species are extinct and more abnormal babies are reproduced because of the waves all around the environment
due to
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wires and the internet .
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,
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the Birthrate
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is reduced ,
people
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and people
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getting
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get
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easily sick . Urbanization is accelerating. In spite of
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, Global warming is increasing on the earth because of
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technology
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. Water is going down . Ice
glacie
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glacier
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is melting .
To conclude
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, the Demerits of the
technology
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will pave its merits . The environment and human beings
is more
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are
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safe
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safer
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in
the
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ancient times rather than
todays
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today
.

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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your arguments by providing specific examples and explanations for each point. For instance, when discussing the benefits of the internet, elaborate on how it connects people or provides educational opportunities.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph connects smoothly to the next and each idea is clearly linked to your main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Review your sentences for clarity, avoiding overly complex or fragmented sentences.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of both sides of the argument and present valid points for each.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction outlines the essay's main theme, and your conclusion summarizes the arguments well.
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