Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Certain Individuals consider that, because of
web
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world get near to each other but
in
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the contrary, other
side
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deem that
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makes human
being
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lonely. The net broke all the geographical barriers, and anyone can get connected with anyone
on
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the
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one click.
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Although
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,
this
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situation decreases the face-to-face interactions between
population
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the population
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. I will discuss both
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perspectives in the upcoming paragraphs. In my opinion, I agree with
former
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statement. To start with, in
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technological
era
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it is important to live without using online
network
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networks
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. It helps in the education field. Students can get education by using platforms
such
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as
google
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, YouTube or any other applications. For
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example, Indians can get admission
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to
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any university
of
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abroad and educate themselves
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via
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video conference.
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, If
person
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a person
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wants to visit
tourist
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a tourist
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destination, he can check on
the
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cyberspace and obtain knowledge about the place.
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, it is very easy to tie up with
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people by video calls,
call
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and
chat
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. Social media is
biggest
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reason that strangers come closer. Meanwhile,
Young
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the Young
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generation has become addicted to
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digital screens. They don’t like to go outside
speak
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to speak
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with their friends. They try to find
reals
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real
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friend
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friends
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in
virtual
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the virtual
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world. And sometimes, it
makes
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has
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negative
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a negative
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impact on their lives. Several times, they get contact
in
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with
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criminal minded
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criminal-minded
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people. By watching
lavish
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the lavish
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life
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lives
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of influencers and celebrity inferiority complex
also
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increased in
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society.
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, Nowadays, People don’t understand the emotion of
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other individuals and
cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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also
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expand
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a lot. In the concussion, everything should be used in
a
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right way and proper portion.
Person
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A person
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should
also
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give time to their loved
one
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ones
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offline. Internet is
boom
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a boom
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for us.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
Strengthen your conclusion to better summarize your discussion and restate your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance clarity and richness of your writing.
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You present a balanced view of the topic, discussing both sides effectively.
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You correctly introduce your opinion in the introduction, which is a good practice.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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