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The graph gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period of 2000 and 2020. Summarize key information nad make comparisons where relavent.

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The line chart illustrates information about the
number
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 of
participants
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 in different activities at one social
center
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 in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
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, after remaining stable for a certain
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, the
number
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 of
participants
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of
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table
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tennis
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 increased,
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 the
number
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 of
participants
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of
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 amateur dramatics decreased after a slight increase. The
participants
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 of film club and martial arts remained relatively stable over the period. Musical performances experienced a gradual increase. In 2000, around 17
participants
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 participated in
table
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tennis
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, and from 2000 to 2010, around 20
participants
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 played
table
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tennis
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. In 2010,
this
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 figure experienced a rapid increase, and in 2020, approximately 56
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 played
table
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tennis
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, in 2000, about 26
participants
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 attended amateur dramatics, and after a slight rise in 2005 with around 30
participants
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, the
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participants
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participant's
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number
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 declined, and in 2020, only 7
participants
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 attended dramatics. The
number
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 of
participants
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 in the film club remained above 60 over the period, and the
number
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 of martial arts
participants
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 remained above 30 over the period. Musical performances were introduced in 2005, and it experienced a gradual rise and reached its peak in 2020 with around 20
participants
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants, table, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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