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Band 5.5

The plans below show a harbor in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided maps illustrate a harbour back in 2000 and its present layout.
Overall
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, it can be observed that it stood in approximately the same shape during the period, with the addition of minor facilities.
To begin
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 with, it can be seen that a new dock, a site with cafes and shops (next to the road) and an extra place for showers and toilets (above the car park) have been added to the location after the years.
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, the area designed for private boats was replaced with the one included for fishing boats.
Secondly
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, the castle located at the very bottom right of the map, now serves the purpose of a hotel with a new road branch leading to it.
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, the public beach located under it is now private for hotel users.
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, the southern car park has
also
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 been connected to the main road similar to the other one.

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Coherence and Cohesion
While the essay is generally well-structured, consider varying your sentence structures for better flow. Incorporating transitional phrases can enhance coherence between points.
Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific examples and details about the changes to reinforce your analysis. This would enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.
Task Achievement
The introduction effectively summarizes the main focus of the maps, setting the context for the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The comparisons made between the past and present layout of the harbour were relevant and well-articulated, showing a clear understanding of the changes.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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