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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars
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The line graph displays how much profit did
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children
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's
books
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, adult fiction and educational
books
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 make from 2002 to 2006 in an unnamed country.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
sales
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 rate for
children
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's
books
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 and educational
books
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 has increased over the years,
although
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 at different rates and consistency.
On the other hand
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, adult fiction has made less and less profit in these year brackets. Looking at the details, from 2002 to 2003, the
sales
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 of
books
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 appropriate for
children
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 and
books
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 with educational purposes increased sharply, by approximately 10 million dollars each. In the next 2 years ,
however
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,
while
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 the
sales
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 figure for kids'
books
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 continued to grow,
although
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 less significantly than before, educational
books
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'
sales
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 rate suffered a fall, dropping back to its starting number of 25 million dollars. In the
last
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 year, both followed an upward trend, stopping at 55 million dollars worth of
children
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's
books
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 and 32 million-dollar
sales
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 of educational
books
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.
Conversely
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,
while
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 the initial profit made from adult fiction was significantly higher than that of
children
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's
books
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, it followed a downward trend,
although
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 fluctuating in the middle, making the least amount of money by 2006.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, books, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales
  • children's books
  • adult fiction
  • educational books
  • million dollars
  • fluctuated
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • interest
  • genre
  • recovery
  • comparative analysis
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