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The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in four different courses at a university from 2017 to 2022. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in four different courses at a university from 2017 to 2022. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the number of
students
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 signed in four distinct
courses
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 at a College from 2017 to 2020.
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, The
students
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 enrolled in Engineering and Humanities subjects have increased from 2015 to 2020,
while
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 the
figures
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of
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for
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 Science and
Business
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 have fluctuated
among
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over
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 the same 6-year period. Engineering was the most
students
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' favourite
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courses
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course
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 in 2015 accounted around 1500 of them entered it.
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, that figure of
course
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 has rose steadily until 2020 with around 1800
students
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. Meanwhile,
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the Humanites
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Humanites
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Humanities
 subject started in
third
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 position among four different
courses
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 in 2015 with about 750
students
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signed
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signing
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this
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course
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.
This
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course
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 has
went
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gone
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 up regularly until 2020
obtained
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obtaining
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 1500
students
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. The number
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students
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of students
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 who picked Science and
Business
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courses
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have
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has
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 experienced up and down from 2015 to 2020. The
figures
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 have enrolled these
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course
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courses
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 accounted
approximately
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for approximately
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 1200 and 400
students
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 in 2015, respectively. The
figures
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of
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for
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 Science have increased to around 1750 in 2017,
while
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 they went down to approximately 1200 in 2020. The
students
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 enrolled
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Business
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in Business
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course
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courses
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also
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undergone
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 an increment until 2017 with around 900,
while
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 it has decreased to around 600 in 2018. Surprisingly, the
figures
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of
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for
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Business
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has
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have
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rose
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risen
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 dramatically to approximately 1700 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, courses, figures, business, course with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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