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The graph below shows the average monthly prices in the pieces of three metals during 2014. Summarize key information nad make comparison where relavent.

The graph below shows the average monthly prices in the pieces of three metals during 2014. Summarize key information nad make comparison where relavent.
The line chart illustrates information about the
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 in average prices of three metals per month in 2014. Overview, it is noticeable from the line chart that over the year, the average
price
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 of
nickel
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 decreased significantly,
while
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price
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 of zinc increased. The average
price
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 of copper experienced a slight rise. From July to
September
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, all prices of metals remained relatively stable. In January, around 6%
change
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 occurred in the
avarage
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average
price
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 of
nickel
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, and in March, it declined
repidly
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rapidly
 and reached
at
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around 1%. In June, about -3% of
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 occurred in the
price
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 of
nickel
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. From July to
September
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, the
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 in
price
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 of
nickel
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 stabilized and changed around -1%. In October, it started to rise again, and the
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 reached
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1%, and till December, the percentage remained the same.
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 in the
price
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 of zinc was around 1% in January, and it rose to 3% sharply in February.
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, it started to decline and reached
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approximately -3% in June. From July to
September
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, the
change
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 in
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price
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 of zinc remained
0.5
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at 0.5
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%, and it reached
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2% in December.
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,
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change
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the change
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the
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price
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 of copper was approximately 2%, and it remained stable at 1% from July to
September
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.
Finally
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, the
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 in the
price
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 of copper reached
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around 1.5%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, price, nickel, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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