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Climate change is the biggest threat to life on our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other big threats to mankind?

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It is widely believed that
change
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 in
climate
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 is the biggest
threat
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 to all living beings on the
earth
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. I think
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 statement is appropriate because
climate
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change
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 leads to global warming, which is alarming for all species on the
earth
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.
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, I do not think there are any other big threats to human life except
climate
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change
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 because it is the root cause of poverty and hunger in developing and underdeveloped countries.
Climate
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change
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 is the biggest
threat
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 to all life because it causes global warming. Global warming is responsible for increasing the
temparature
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temperature
 of the world.
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, it leads to
the
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 rise in sea level.
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 phenomenon causes
flood
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floods
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,
tsunami
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tsunamis
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 and other types of natural disasters.
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, in recent
time
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times
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,
climate
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 specialists have disclosed that
,
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 the temperature of the world has increased
around
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 2 degrees compared to the
last
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 decade.
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 has increased the
possibilities
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 of natural disasters
approximately
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 23% in northern areas. In my opinion, there is no other
threat
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 to the
earth
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 except
climate
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change
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. One of the biggest problems caused by
climate
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change
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 is
rise
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a rise
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 in global temperature.
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 event negatively impacts the weather and fertility of the agricultural lands. If
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this
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 two things are severely affected by
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change
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, the developing and underdeveloped countries will encounter challenges to grow food.
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, people in these countries will suffer from poverty and hunger.
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,
climate
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change
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causes
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 a damaging
affect
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 on the weather of Sudan, and
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, in South Sudan, people cannot grow rice
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 lack of rain, which is their main crop. In conclusion, I feel that
climate
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change
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 is the biggest
threat
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 on the
earth
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, and there are no other threats than
climate
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change
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 in the world because it is the main reason for hunger and poverty.

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task achievement
Expand on other potential threats to human life to strengthen your argument about climate change as the primary threat.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain a logical flow between the points, possibly with clearer topic sentences in some paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Check for minor spelling mistakes such as 'temperature' and 'affect' to improve overall accuracy.
task achievement
Consider providing a counter-argument or acknowledging other views on threats to life for a more balanced discussion.
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You have a clear stance on the topic, making your argument easy to follow.
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Your examples are relevant and help illustrate the impact of climate change effectively.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystems
  • natural disasters
  • rising sea levels
  • endangerment of species
  • economic implications
  • fishery yields
  • climate change
  • disaster recovery
  • infectious diseases
  • air and water pollution
  • nuclear war
  • pandemics
  • artificial intelligence
  • scope
  • pervasive impact
  • exacerbate
  • resource scarcity
  • disease outbreaks
  • territorial disputes
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