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The plans below show the layout of a university sport’s center, now and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two plans depict the changes in
an
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 university sports
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center
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 after future redevelopment.
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, there will be numerous upgrades and changes, where among the most prominent ones is the
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 expansion of the indoor space.
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, in order for
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 to happen, the outdoor courts will be removed. What
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 will be expanded is the gym. It is predicted that it will cover approximately twice the space it covers today. The reception, the 25m swimming
poll
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 in the middle of the
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center
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 will remain there. Both the changing room and the seating which
surrond
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surround
surrounds
 the
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 pool will
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 not be relocated.
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, a new hall for
sport
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 events will be
contructed
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constructed
 just in front of the gym and behind the seating of the swimming pool. The future plans are shown two new
changings
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 rooms, one in each south corner, too.
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, next to the southwest one, a shop for
sports's
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sports
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 equipment will be located,
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 the southeast one, a new cafe will be present.
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, on the northeast of the
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, two dance studios will be built side by side and on the northwest
side
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 a new leisure pool will be present.

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task achievement
Consider providing a brief summary of the main changes in your introduction to give the reader an overview of the plans.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious of small spelling errors such as 'surrond' which should be 'surround'. These can affect clarity.
coherence and cohesion
When discussing the changes, ensure that you clearly delineate between the old and new features for better coherence.
task achievement
You provided a clear overview of the changes in the sports center, indicating the most significant modifications.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of comparative phrases, such as 'cover approximately twice the space', helped convey important details about the changes.

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