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Band 4.5

University students should pay in full for their own education instead of the society funding their studies. The reason is that individuals tend to benefit after graduation more than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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While
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society
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 should fund
students
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'
education
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 in college,
students
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 ought to pay
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education
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for education
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 by themselves. The reason is that the folk don't get the benefit larger than the individuals who have graduated. I completely disagree
about
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with
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this
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 notion as not all
students
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 have similar wealth to fund their school.
Moreover
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, the regulation of
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education's
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education
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 funding should be fair and
transparant
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transparent
 which
society
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 could
also
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 monitor it.
Firstly
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, everyone in
this
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 world
are
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is
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 eligible to accept
the
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an
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education
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. Meanwhile, not everyone has
previllage
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privilege
 to experience university. One of the
problem
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problems
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 is they don't have enough money to fulfill their dreams
learning
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of learning
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 in
the
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college. With the inflation and globalization that happened in
this
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 world,
the
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money become more important than before, especially for the budget that
needed
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is needed
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 to get involved in the university.
Scholarship
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Scholarships
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 that come from
society
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 could help them to reach their future destination. Awardees who get the funding would
gratitude
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be grateful
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 to the facilities that they earned.
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, the
goverment
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government
 must
to
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apply
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regulate the scholarship fairly and obviously. They should select candidates with rigid
requirement
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requirements
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 related to
the
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their
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 background
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
Subsequently
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, the agreement to awardees should be engaged with mutual advantages. For
instances
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instance
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, awardees who have graduated and got a job should
funding
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fund
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 their junior
instead
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 with robust regulations.
Consequently
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, the funding from
society
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 would
have
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create
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cycling
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a cycling
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 ecosystem about
education
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. In conclusion,
although
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 the reason about the common people
don't
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doesn't
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 get more advantages compared to the
students
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 who have graduated
by
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on
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 the folk's budget, I greatly disagree about
this
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 idea as not all
students
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 have money to
enroll
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enrol
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 the college.
Considerly
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Considerably
, the regulation of
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education's
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education
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 funding must be fair and
transparant
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transparent
.

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