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The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
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The bar graphic provides data about the kilometres of
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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, Bike, Ari,
Bus
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Buses
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 and Rail during the years 1990 and 2000. It
also
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 provides a total distance for each year. In 1990 a total of 100
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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kilometres were
travel
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travelled
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, which increased
around
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by around
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 15
billions
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billion
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 by 2000 with a total of 115 Buses and trains covered the greatest distance with a
slightly
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 increase over the years, from 40 to 45 and from 35 to 40 respectively. The other 3
mode
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modes
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 of transport had less than 10 each, the lowest being Ari in 1990 with only 3
then
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 jump to 10,
In contrast
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, bicycle
when
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went
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 from 10 to 7 by 2000.
Surprinsingly
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Surprisingly
, motorcycle numbers were steady over both years.
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. It
is clearly observe
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 that there
were
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was
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 more distance travelled in 2000 than in 1990, and the passengers predominantly
choose
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chose
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 buses.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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