In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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because it's going to help their
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financially.
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will suffer from
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of their
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. In the coming
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I am going to explore my reasons
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why I
am agree
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for
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working
parents
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First,
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life currently is very expensive. Father alone can not offer to provide the essentials for his family
such
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as rent, groceries, internet and school supplies,
moreover
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, individuals started to see luxury lifestyle
is
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priority
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a priority

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and
inportant
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important

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as much as the essentials
for example
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travel and
buing
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buying
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high quality
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brands.
Second,
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rather than
money
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I believe that
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will benefit from the quality of the
time
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they
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with their
parent
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more
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the quantity. When the caregivers spend some
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working
in
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somthing
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they love,
this
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will charge their energy to come back home
with
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in

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good
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mood to see their
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and share with enjoyable
time
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, I knew a friend who's her mother is a doctor and spent a lot of
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at the hospital
while
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she was a kid but
still
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she is grateful that her mother raised her the way who is she now financially,
education
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and personality
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, I am convinced that the
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in
early
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years are benefit from going to daycare or preschool
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the
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at work. In detail, the child will meet with the other
children
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and
teacher
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the teacher

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shar
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pe with
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appropriate age knowledge, playing games and exploring the outside house environment. All
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this
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features will help to build up
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strong
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and
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personality in the
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Finally
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, there are a lot of
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about working
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parents
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in
presence
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of
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and everyone has
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openion
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i
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will support my
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  • role models
  • self-reliance
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  • emotional well-being
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  • quality time
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