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Band 4.5

ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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practise
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learning
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university
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supports
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powerful
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disadvantages
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task achievement
Develop your introduction further by clearly stating your opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'On the other hand') to help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling errors such as 'recntly', 'duscisse', 'gredautions', etc. These can impact your overall clarity.
task achievement
You provided a personal example from your experience, which makes your argument more relatable and strengthens your points.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of work-based training, which is essential for a balanced discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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