The chart below shows the different levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of various types of post-school

qualification

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qualifications

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preferred by Australians, broken up by gender, in 1999.

It is clear that

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by far the most popular among men was skilled vocational

diplomas

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whereas

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for women it was an undergraduate diploma.

Overall

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, the proportions of males holding post-school

qualification

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qualifications

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were higher than

these

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those

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of females. Focusing first on the most frequently

preffered

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preferred

types of education, 90% of males received skilled vocational

diplomas

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whereas

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the corresponding figure for females was 80% fewer. Regarding undergraduate

diplomas

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, they were the most popular among women, with 70% of them

undertake

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undertaking

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this

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type of tertiary education, as opposed to half as many of men. As for the remaining types of qualifications, 70% and 60% of Australian males

reseived

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received

postgraduate

diplomas

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and

masters

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master's

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degrees, respectively,

whereas

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for

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, for

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females, the corresponding figures were 30% and 40%. Regarding bachelor's degree, 50%

women

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of women

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had

this

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qualification, which was 5% more than

those

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apply

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among

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apply

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men.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words diplomas with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

158 words

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The chart below shows the different levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people believe that reading books are better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think person happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe this depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.