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Band 3

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps compare changes in Porth Harbour between 2000 and
current
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the present
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 time.
Overall
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, the area has undergone substantial modifications and
modernisations
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modernisation
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 over the given time period. After
contructing
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constructing
 new facilities, the zone has
become
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gone
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 from
rarely
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a rarely
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 utilised rural territory to
the
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a
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 commercial one with necessary amenities for visitors.
Only
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The only
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 untouched zones in current days are car parks and the public beach, which is located
on
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in
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 the northeast part.
However
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, other facilities increased in number
such
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 as docks, passenger boats, showers and toilets, showing the development of service.
In addition
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, fishing boats and marine, which
is
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are
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 for personal yachts, were relocated into each other's spots.
Abandoned
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The abandoned
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 castle,
on the other hand
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, was converted into
the
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a
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 modern hotel, possessing the previous public beach and making it for customers' use. The road, which used to lead to the only lifeboat area, was reconstructed and another direction to the hotel was added. What is more, cafes and markets were set up as well, making conditions to eat out with the view of
sea
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the sea
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.

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task achievement
Improve the clarity and specific details of your comparisons. You could elaborate more on how the docks, passenger boats, and new facilities directly benefit the area or visitors.
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding transitional phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs, making it easier for the reader to follow your comparisons and points.
task achievement
You provided a clear overall summary of the changes in Porth Harbour and successfully compared features from 2000 to today.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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