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Band 3.5

Many believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment. Only government and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you.do you agree or disagree?

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The
environment
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 is a gift that needs a lot of nurturing .Owing to
this
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, strata of society deem that individuals can make small efforts for the betterment of
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environment
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. I,
however
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, partially adhere
with
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to
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suggested
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the suggested
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 idea
due to
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 umpteen reasons, which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. On the
one
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 hand, there are
number
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a number
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 of reasons
how
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why
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one
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 can make little efforts to save
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environment
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the environment
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. First and foremost is using garbage bins,
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, people should not spread litter on empty places
rather
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but rather
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 try to put it in
dustbin
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a dustbin
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 To
examplify
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exemplify
,
upto
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up to
 80% of waste
are
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is
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 just thrown on roadsides or empty places in India
according to
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 the survey conducted by WHO.
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, folks should try to plant more trees in their garden or house which can be helpful in saving the
environment
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 and prevent
one
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 from health issues.
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,
Government
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the Government
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 play a significant role
to nurture
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in nurturing
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environment
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the environment
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.
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,government policies and corporate social responsibilities are critical for large-scale change as
ministry
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the ministry
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 should provide awareness among society about environmental damage and its causes.
As
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apply
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Awareness is not only
one
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 reason but encouragement
also
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 plays a significant role
to make
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in making
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 people
understandable
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understand
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about
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apply
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sustainability.To
exampify
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explain
,
law makers
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lawmakers
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 of India
has
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have
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 started the campaign Sawash
bharat abhiyan
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Bharat Abhiyan
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 which has improved the
environment
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.
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, I would like to say that
federal
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the federal
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 government and individuals both should make equal participation to improve the
environment
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.

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task achievement
Include a clear thesis statement in the introduction to reflect your own position more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to elaborate more on your ideas to support your arguments and provide a clearer logical progression between points.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases effectively to improve the flow of your essay, ensuring each paragraph connects well to the next.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view, acknowledging the roles of both individuals and government in environmental improvement.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecological awareness
  • sustainability
  • environmental conservation
  • government policies
  • corporate social responsibility
  • grassroots movements
  • public demand
  • informed choices
  • community initiatives
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • environmental footprint
  • waste reduction
  • advocacy
  • mobilize support
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