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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
The map shows the advancement of a rural area near London named Chorleywood between the years 1868 to 1994
due to
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 which the population rapidly went up.
Overall
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,
due to
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 the introduction of
railway
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the railway
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, the village station neighbourhood has a great expansion.
In addition
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 to building the motorway the right of the village
also
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 urbanised. In the years 1868 to 1883 Chorleywood did not see much development, but after the inauguration of
railway
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the railway
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, the west side of Chorleywood saw an increase in advancement from 1909 to 1970.
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, the improvement started in 1883 on the left side of the suburb
due to
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 which the railway was introduced in the first place. From the year 1970, the progress shifted towards the right side of the hamlet as the motorway was built in the same year.In the period between 1970 to 1994, the evolution doubled spread across the right part of the crossroads.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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