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The chart below shows the percentage of people who owned different types of electronic devices in a country between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who owned different types of electronic devices in a country between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides key information about the
percentage
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 of people who own electronic devices
such
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 as smartwatches, tablets, laptops, and smartphones. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there has been an increase in the
percentage
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 of people who
owning
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own
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 electronic devices over the decade.
In addition
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, the largest increase was in
smartphones
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smartphone
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ownership
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,
while
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smartwatches
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smartwatch
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ownership
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 increased slightly.
According to
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 the data,
smartwatches
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smartwatch
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ownership
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 was 2% in 2010. It increased to about 10% in 20915 and
further
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 rose to 4% in 2020. The
percentage
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 of people who owned tablets was 15% in 2010. From 2015 to 2020, there was a dramatic increase, rising from 35% to 55%. Regarding laptops, the
percentage
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 was 45% in 2010,
while
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 smartphone
ownership
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 was 30%. In 2015, laptop
ownership
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 was 60%,
whereas
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 in 2020 increased to 75%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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