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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He/she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * suggest an interesting part of the city to live in * describe the public transport in your city * say how your friend can meet new people there You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ______________,

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I heard
,
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 you need advice about how to live in my
country
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. In my
country
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, there are a lot of
roles
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rules
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 about walking on the street or with
transports
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. You should be careful in my
country
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.
This
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 is
a
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 reason
is
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that
,
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 in my
country
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 allows which all people can shoot with guns. If we are coming to interesting places and beautiful gardens in my
country
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, there are several famous places
such
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 as Registan,
it's
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 location is in Samarkand, Tashkent mall, it's location is that in Tashkent where considered the capital of Uzbekistan. When
is
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 comes to public transport in my
country
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, There is a lot of transport to use,
such
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 as taxis,
it
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they
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required
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 only 5.000
so'm
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,
i
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 think it is convenient for you and we do not have underground transport
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 as the metro and others.If you want to meet new people in my
country
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, you should visit concerts or lessons places. There are a lot of people like you.If you visit my
country
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,
i
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 will invite to you
in
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my house, we will talk about everything. Your very beautiful friend Humoyun

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
task response
Try to provide more specific details when describing places and experiences.
task achievement
You included personal touches and an invitation to your friend, which adds warmth to the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your descriptions of interesting places in your country were engaging and will likely interest your friend.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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