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The pie charts below show usage share of desktop browsers in 2019 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show usage share of desktop browsers in 2019 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 pie chart depicts usage of the desktop browsers in 2 years 2019 and 2021. It is clear from the graph that,
the
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Chrome
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 in both years is the most used + 65% .
According to
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 what is shown,
firstly
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, in 2019 the uses of Safari and Firefox are the same by presented 9%
while
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, Edge is around (5%) and other browsers
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 8 per cent.
Additionally
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,
Chrome
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uses
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 by the user up to 69% .
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other hand
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another hand
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,
during
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in
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 2021
a
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apply
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Chrome
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 is still
famous
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a famous
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 engine and
using
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used
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 by 67%
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users
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of users
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while
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,
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 Safari and Edge
users
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 slightly increased for both.
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,
other's
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other
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users
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is
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 (6%)
from
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overall
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, and the proportion of Firefox
users
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 is 8% out of 100%.
To sum up
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, we could say that, a
Chrome
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 is the highest engine which represents more than half of the customers in 2 years
also
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,
other's
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 browsing tools it is illustrate the lowest target people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chrome, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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