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The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts describe the information regarding the causes behind moving to and from European
country
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countries
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,which have various reasons
such
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 as related to job , family and study and many more during the time period of 2009. The data is calibrated in percentage. Looking into more details, a quarter of individuals left their country because of definite
job
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jobs
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 and families.Meanwhile , one-fifth area was covered by people who
was
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 searching
jobs
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for jobs
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 , wanted to
do
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apply
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study and
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for another
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another reasons
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another reason
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,respectively .
While
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small
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a small
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 portion had no
reason
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 to settle in Europe. On
the
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apply
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another
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other
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 chart, the majority (38%) of
population
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the population
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 wanted to move from Europe
due to
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deifinite
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definite
 jobs.15% and 7% figures described
about
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apply
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amily
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family
 and education demands to move, considerably. The minority of
portion
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the portion
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covered
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is covered
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 by
not
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no
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 known
reason
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. Nearly more than
tenth
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a tenth
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individuals
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of individuals
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 migrated ,just for
looking
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apply
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a
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 occupation .Meanwhile, just 4 per cent
didnt
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didn't
 know the
reason
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.
Overall
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, The vast majority of people migrated from Europe in search of
job
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jobs
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 than emigrants;
however
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,
less
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fewer
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 people didn't have any
reason
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 to move.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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