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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map
is describing
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 the features of
development
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the development
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 of
village
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the village
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due to
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slowly
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the slow
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 growth of
population
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the population
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 area of London during the time period of 1868 to 1994. In 1868 , there
had been
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were
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 just two main roads which
was
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were
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 connecting village people to
station
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the station
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 . After the decade , the growth of
populace
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the populace
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 started increasing .In
19th
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the 19th
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 century , the motorway was built for
the
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apply
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easy access to
village
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the village
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 and
th
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the
 roundabout was installed , which is connected to
main
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the main
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 road ,in order to decrease the traffic
in
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on
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 the east
side
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 .
Furthermore
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, more people started living
to
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on
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 the south-west
side
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 ,
then
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 , the demand
of
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for
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 public transport increased ,to tackle that problem,the
Govrnment
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government
 made
the
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a
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 railway track by crossing the main road and highway , from
east
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the east
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 to
west
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the west
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side
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.
Overall
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,
in
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at
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 the end of
19th
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the 19th
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 century ,the majority of people
residing
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resided
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 in the north and south
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side
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,
that's
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that is
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 why three major transport areas
developed
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were developed
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 over there , for the local
benefits
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benefit
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.There is no change in the north-west area.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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