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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps compare the site of the Southwest Airport between the present time and a year later, after development.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of exits will rise and new parts will be added to the airfield.
To begin
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, the count of departures and arrivals is doubled.
Additionally
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, the Café and the Check-in will be located differently from now in the Security passport control, and
also
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 a Bag drop will be added in the northwest corner of the room.
Furthermore
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, shops do not exist on the runway at the moment they will be constructed at the top of the Security passport control room. The next change is that the Walkway will be replaced by a wider Sky train.
Although
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 the Walkway is on the left side of the hallway, the Sky train will be situated in the centre of it
while
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 both are surrounded by doorway.
Moreover
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, 10 more fences will be built on the north side of the hangar. So, the total count of conduits will rise from 10 to 18 within a year. There are no facilities in the Passport control customs now,
however
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, a Café, an ATM, and a Car hire will be manufactured in the right part of the chamber.

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coherence and cohesion
Provide a clearer overall summary that encapsulates the main changes without adding details. Consider restructuring to separate main features and comparisons.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each point made flows logically to support the main comparison. Use more linking words to improve transitions between the ideas.
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Avoid using absolute terms like 'will be constructed’ or ’will be manufactured’; consider using terms like 'are expected to include' to make statements more assertive yet cautious.
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Be careful with grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('the count of departures and arrivals is doubled' should be 'the number of departures and arrivals will double'), to ensure clarity and correctness.
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You effectively identified many of the key changes planned for the airport, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
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The use of specific details, such as the addition of fences and facilities in the passport control area, shows a good level of detail and comprehension of the maps.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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