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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 day and age,
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 demand to interact and exchange information makes
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 a vital part of our society. There has been a controversial debate
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 whether verbal or written language is a more powerful form of
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. In my opinion, I argue that neither of the forms could be said to be superior since they have particular effects and nuances depending on specific circumstances. On the one hand, speeches have been used as effective tools to convey feelings, expressions and thoughts to a large number of people as they allow speakers to emotionally connect with their listeners. By changing the tone of voice and making gestures, speakers could convey their wide range of emotions that would inspire and influence others through a powerful speech, song or poetry.
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, in the past, after President Ho Chi Minh read the Declaration of Independence in Ba Dinh
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, all Vietnamese residents
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 with hope and determination by the warm, moved and
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 voice of their Great Father.
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, spoken
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 would create few
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 and misunderstandings since words and grammar used in verbal language are simpler and clearer than
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 one. When people interact face to face, they would immediately ask for more advice and information about problems that they are struggling with, avoiding undesirable
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.
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, writing is
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 a mandatory factor that appears in everyday
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. In the workplace, institutions, written messages, emails and documents are effective tools,
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 spoken
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 might sometimes be ignored or changed after interpretation, written forms consistently maintain their formality and clarity.
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, written
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 is required in legal procedures and important information
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 as memos, reports or research are often kept in written form.
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,
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the separation and impartiality of the written form,
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can create more insightful feelings and detailed meanings that make people engage in deeper and more mature content.
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, reading stories and novels will convey different feelings and emotions to each person, if you read
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 find details and implications that provoke your mind. In conclusion, I argue that speeches and
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;
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, it cannot be said that one is more powerful than the other.

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Ensure that all points are equally developed to maintain a balanced argument throughout the essay.
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Try to include a more nuanced discussion on which situations may benefit more from one form of communication over the other.
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Your introduction clearly outlines your position and provides a thoughtful perspective on the topic.
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You provided compelling examples to support your arguments, which added depth to your points.
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The logical structure of your essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs for each argument, making it easy to follow.
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