he charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married in one particular country in 1996 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and repairing the main features, and making comparisons where relevant

he charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married in one particular country in 1996 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and repairing the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for he charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married in one particular country in 1996 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and repairing the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
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details based on the
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groups of individuals and at what
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they got married in a specific country in the years 1996 and 2008.
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, in both
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years,
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child marriages were almost negligible, most
females
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got married between the
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age
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ages
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of 25 to 29. The percentage
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remained
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the same for
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between the
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age
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ages
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of 25 to 34 in 1996
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the
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maximum
males
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got married between the
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age
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ages
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of 30 and 34 in 2008. In 1996,
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no
males
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below the
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of 20 were married, about 1%
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females
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of females
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were.
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ratio reached
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around 2% for
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and about 6% for
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between the
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of 20 to 24.
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Most
males
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and
females
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got married between the
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of 25 to 29.
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declined for
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, it remained steady for
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till the
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of 34 after which a decline followed for both
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genders reaching 2%
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females
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of females
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getting married by the
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of 44 and about 5%
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males
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of males
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. In the year 2008, a very negligible
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of child marriages took place. The number of marriages between 20 to 24 years of
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was
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not more than 3%. Almost 12%
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females
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of females
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between the
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age
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ages
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of 25 to 29 got married, and
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percentage dropped by around 2% for each succeeding
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group.
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, only 8%
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males
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of males
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between the
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age
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ages
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of 25 to 29 got married in 2008.
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rose by almost 3% for the next
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group and gradually declined reaching almost 6.5% by the
age
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of 44.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, females, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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