In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common.” Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a belief that paying without cash via applications on the

phone

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is more common these days. From my point of view, I generally agree with

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statement

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, there are some drawbacks that we should take into consideration. There are some advantages to paying online.

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, the majority of people take their phones wherever they go. So, it is convenient to pay via

phone

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but it might not

possible

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to bring money for different reasons

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as insufficient time to get money from an ATM. More to add, it is much safer not to carry cash. In the online method, only the owner of the account can access payment. There are some disadvantages to

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kind of payment,

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, depending on technology might cause some problems.

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, someone might forget their

phone

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or even their

phone

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is shut down because of no electricity charge, so could not buy their needs.

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, I've mentioned the safety of using online methods

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, if we don't care about the applications' privacy and download them from an unknown source, online hackers invade our privacy

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which, increases financial vulnerability.

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, I agree that the technology of online payment is growing rapidly and the positive feedback on

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method outweighs the drawbacks.

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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points, which would help to clarify your ideas and make your arguments more compelling.

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Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear topic sentence and that each point flows logically to the next.

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Consider a more balanced approach when discussing advantages and disadvantages, which could enhance the overall presentation of your argument.

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You have a clear stance on the topic, indicating your agreement with the shift towards mobile payments.

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You successfully identified both the advantages and disadvantages of mobile payment applications, which is crucial to the discussion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

212 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

convenience
safety
security
time-saving
cashless transactions
dependence on technology
privacy concerns
accessibility issues
financial vulnerability

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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common.” Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

In many cities, the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?