IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

New neighbours have just moved into the apartment next to you. They have a dog which barks all day while they are at work. You have tried to talk to them but nothing has changed. Write to your local council to complain about the dog. In the letter, explain the situation  describe the dog and the noise it makes say what you want the council to do   You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my discomfort caused
due to
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 the noise created
from
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 my neighbour's
pet
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dog
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. Just a week back we had Mr Smith moving in with his family and a
pet
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 in our tower on the second floor.
While
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 both Mr and Mrs Smith are working, usually the
pet
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 is alone at home. There have been serval instances where I have noticed that the
pet
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 was tied with a cord in the balcony and barking loudly. I guess
this
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 is because the
dog
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 must have got irritated as it was caged the whole day in the outdoors.
Hence
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,
sympathasing
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sympathising
sympathizing
 with the little animal I tried to approach Mr Smith and explained
him
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to him
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 the harsh conditions that the innocent animal was facing in his absence. But, to my
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surprise
suprise
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suprise,
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 none of the Smiths
were
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was
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 bothered about their
pet
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 and now it
was become
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became
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 a
dailly
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daily
 routine. The
dog
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 is often found shouting its lungs out and
this
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 is a pain to our ears.
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, I would appeal
the
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 council to adopt some serious action and
saving
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 the
dog
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 on
humanitarity
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humanitarian
 grounds. I am an animal lover and
therefore
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requesting
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 you to intervene in
this
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 case and provide a resolution. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your
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 sincerely , Richa

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use a clearer logical structure to enhance the flow of ideas. Begin each paragraph with a topic sentence and develop it further.
task achievement
Check for minor grammatical and spelling errors (e.g., 'serval' should be 'several', 'suprise' should be 'surprise', 'daily' should be 'daily').
task achievement
The letter effectively conveys the situation and your concerns regarding the barking dog.
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You demonstrate a kind tone and compassion towards the animal, which is commendable.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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